Friday, June 14, 2013

Exhibit #2: 'A Man and a Gentleman', Definition writing

Definition Paper Reflection
Christian Amering
A Man and a Gentleman
When I began writing this paper, I wasn't sure exactly where I was looking to go with the topic. I knew I wanted to compare the idea of a man and a gentleman. Before I started writing, I looked up a bunch of quotes and pictures and found one that very closely related the two different types of guys. This essentially then became the base and form of how I wrote my paper.
While I wrote this paper, I found it really easy to compare the two subjects. I feel that there is a clear difference in a man and a gentleman such that a gentleman is willing to take the extra step for others. I made sure to utilize this in my paper as I continued to write. One of the harder parts however was what kind of paper to write. I wanted to use the picture that I found that compared a man and gentleman, but wasn't sure the best way to get the point across. I ended up using each statement made in the picture, and then expanding upon it with more details. One example was, “A man tries to make his mark,; a gentleman strives to leave a mark” and then expanded upon this idea.
The best part of my draft is the way that I was able to take a quote, and expand upon it. Despite this writing task being a definition paper, I was still able to use other skills learned during the exemplification paper to use in this paper. The draft I wrote initially got good reviews from my peers and they said that using the quotes and then expanding upon it really created a way to define what the quote was defining, and how the quotes were defining the thesis of the difference between a man and a gentleman.

As I read my peers papers in our peer review session, I learned of different techniques of getting their thesis across. Some would do the same as me and make a point, and then expand upon it. Others would write the definition and either agree or disagree with what the technical term is. Both of these techniques seemed to be effective, but some topics work better with certain techniques. 

Here is my revised copy:

A Man and a Gentleman

            Immaturity is within every guy you meet, and is something we will carry with us till the day we die. But how we carry about ourselves is what really clarifies who each individual guy really is. While some may see the word ‘Man’ and ‘Gentleman’ to be the same word or descriptor, they are far from the same.
            “A man tries to make his mark; a gentleman strives to leave a mark.” Gentlemen not only seek to make a mark on their own lives, and others, but will see it through. This is an aspect that most people fail to see, as they only feel as though “nice guys always finish last”.
Leave it to all guys to admit that they strive to conquer more in their life, but trust in a gentleman to make that dream a reality. Most actors today are considered just a man. They try to make a mark by the movies the produce, and their lavish lifestyles. The true gentleman actors, such as Brad Pitt, strive to leave a mark, not only by having a strong set of morals, but by also giving back to charity.
            “A man accepts a favor, a gentleman returns the favor.” There is a small difference between acknowledging a favor, and returning the favor. While most man will appreciate a favor, few gentlemen will return the favor. Not only do they recognize the thoughtfulness of the others but they want to make them feel the same way.
            “A man gives orders, a gentleman inspires.” Men always believe their selves are dominant and will take charge of a situation whether they believe they are capable of it or not. All though they may not admit it, men believe they are the dominant gender, as most men take control of most serious situations (Government, Sports etc.) A gentleman will not only take charge, but he will morph his own personality into a leader. Most men fail to see from this point of view. Whenever men play sports, they always look to take over the game and be the best player, but the best players are the ones that lead by example, lead others, and strive to meet new goals. The controversy of who was the best teammate between LeBron and Michael Jordan is the best example. Even though many argue that LeBron is building the best skills in the history of the NBA, they fail to compare his leadership and morals to those of Michael Jordan. While most stars are selfish, Michael Jordan once said,to be successful you have to be selfish, or else you never achieve. And once you get to your highest level, then you have to be unselfish. Stay reachable. Stay in touch. Don’t isolate.”

            “A man fits the mold; a gentleman tries to break it.” Most men may come across as the same person, all seeking to be the dominant person, always capable of being lazy, and cocky. Whether you believe it or not, men were all born with the same immaturity that probably has either positively or negatively shaped their lives. Gentlemen do fit this mold that our gender has shaped to today, but they also try and break free of this depiction, and strive for more.
            To simplify the matter, a man is willing to do the bare minimum to keep him and others happy, while a gentleman is willing to take the extra step.   The Merriam-Webster Dictionary defines a gentleman as a man who combines gentle birth or rank with chivalrous qualities. A gentleman brings qualities such as generous with his time, a positive outlook, a life-long learner and known for his integrity. George Clooney provides the dapper attire and attitude towards life to classify himself as a top gentleman today. To achieve such a thing, you don’t need to be born from with it, but acquire it overtime and have the will to put others in front of yourself. 


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